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Many people consider that increasing the age at which people can get driving licenses can improve road safety

#people #age #licenses #road #safety
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Many
people
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 consider that increasing the age at which
people
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 can get driving licenses can improve road safety.
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 might prevent some
accidents
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 from happening due to the experience but I strongly believe there is a better way than
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. The main point of raising the number of ages at which
people
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 can drive is that to reduce the number of car
accidents
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 due to inexperience.There are a number of reasons why a 16-year old teenager driving a car can lead to an accident.As we know, teenagers around that age like to test things they haven't experience before.Like driving a car or even smoking and drinking.Some of the teenagers are unaware of the dangers which might happen if they drink and drive at the same time and
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 some
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 happen.
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,these teenagers are really rare and they are really aware of those kinds of danger.I believe these kinds of opinions occur from one or two
accidents
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 of
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 kind and
people
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 started thinking that we should increase the legal age for driving cars.It might reduce the
accidents
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 but it is still insignificant.There are more factors that lead to
accidents
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 more than just inexperience.Like,the rough roads,traffic,and so on.So I believe we should start with improving the public transports to lead to less traffic. In conclusion,I believe it is the poorly built rough roads and traffic and so on are the main factors leading to the accident.
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