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14. People have little understanding of the important of the natural world. What are the reasons and how can people learn more about the natural world.

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Nature is one of
biggest
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 and greatest blessings for humankind,
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, nowadays , people
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 to recognise it as one.Unawareness and excessive use of private vehicles are two main
cause
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 of
this
 ignorance .
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this
 essay ,will suggest appropriate measures to tackle
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 issues. There are numerous
reaons
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reasons
 why people don't understand the importance of natural resources .
Firstly
 , unawareness about
environmental
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the environmental
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 world ,nowadays ,massive extremely uses the
non renewable
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 resources
such
 as coal ,oil and water without a
second
 thought for
future
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 generation what would be they do ,if resources will be completely depleted.A survey conducted by
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 revealed that
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human negligence is the main cause of
depletion
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the depletion
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 of petroleum in the world .
Secondly
, due to owned of private vehicles
also
 make
environment
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 worse .Emission of carbon dioxide and
other toxigenic pollutant
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another toxigenic pollutant
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 from the vehicles ,get mixed in
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greenhouse
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green house
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greenhouse
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 gases that
leads
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 to
increase
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the
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 nitrous oxide level in
air
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, which would be responsible for global warming. To combat
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this
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 issues,
government
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the government
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 should
be organize
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 awareness camps in which
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importance and its
maintainace
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maintenance
about
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 nature should be taught to
community
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 and motives them to lesser usage of petroleum and coal .
Moreover
,reforestation
also
effective
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 way to maintains the ecological balance .
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also
 helps to
maintains
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 the natural habitat of
flaura
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flora
 and fauna.  To conclude,
natural
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 world
are
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 deteriorated by
improper
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 behaviour of man.To make
environment
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the environment
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 safer and longer ,it makes
duty
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the duty
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 of both citizens and regimes .
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