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Some people today prefer to get advice for medical problems and do not want to visit a doctor. Why is this? Is this a positive or a negative development?

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Scary Zebra a few seconds ago The table elucidates the number
deaths
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of deaths
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 which related to alcohol
consumption
 in seven different
europien
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European
 nations in 2005 and the
amount
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 of beers was drunken in 2002 in these countries. The
consumption
 rate is measured in
liters
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. At a cursory glance, it is clearly seen
thatCzech
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that Czech
 Republic had not only the highest number of
alcohol related
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death
 but beer
consumption
 as well. More males died compared to females Regarding alcohol
death
, Germany stood at
second
 position with
at
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1,185,000, which was nearly 20000
death
 less than
Czech
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the Czech
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 Republic. In the bottom level both Lithuania and Estonia , 125000 and 383000 respectively. Other countries in the group are Ireland, Canada and Austria. In
this
first
 two countries had nearly 6 lakhs and
austria
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Austria
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 had 10 lakhs deaths. Lowest beer
consumption
 in Canada, followed by
Luthunia
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Lithuania
, where female
death
 was just above ten thousand.
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 number of
death
 of males
happended
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happened
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