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University students must pay all tuition fees, because it benefits mostly them individually, rather than the society as a whole. Do you agree or disagree?

#university #students #tuition #fees #society
In order to study, the scholars have to make all the payment of their institution's fee which has numerous advantages to them only because the education or
knowlegde
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knowledge
, they receive do not have any impact on the growth of
society
 that I completely disagree with. The essay will discuss both views and will provide a clear opinion of who should pay the
tution
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tuition
 expenses with relevant
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.
To begin
 with,
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society
 is being created by the residents of the nation and
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 development depends upon how literate they are. To illustrate, people working in different fields as doctors, engineers, artists, athletes etc. have a huge contribution to their
society
. It only happened when they went to university and teach
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 to achieve that sort of education.
Hence
, I advocate
this
 belief that
society
 has no influence
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 the undergraduates.
On the other hand
, there are families who do
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 have an earning person like single mothers, disabled persons, orphan children and many more. How can they bear their learning expenditure? They have to work at small age in order to feed themselves or their families.
For instance
, the maximum rate of poverty has been surveyed in India, due to
lack
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 of financial support of the system.
As a result
, underage pupils begin taking part in illegal activities named as theft, robbery, gambling, drug intake and so on which are increasing day by day in India. Overall, as it is stated above, the benefits are more to the community if the government take some steps named as making learning free of cost, to help their younger generation in case of tutoring.
Therefore
, I believe that all the learners should get
this
 opportunity being as state's future not if they have sufficient funds.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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