Wealthy countries should accept more refugees and provide them with basic assistance such as food and housing. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Prosperous nations should extend their support to the fleeing
people
from
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political
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by supporting basic humanitarian aid. I strongly agree with
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idea.
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,
people
who lost their homes in their country does not have
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secure future as their chances of getting back to their country of origin would almost become negligible. In
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decade, there
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been steady growth in
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of
people
with no recognized identity.
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fortunate nation should lend their generosity in welcoming these helpless
people
providing them with accommodation and livelihood.
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, after
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civil
war
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millions of
people
displaced. Canada and Turkey offered them Permanent Residency and absorb them
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their societies.
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, as per
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Red Cross society
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many humanitarian relief companies are under relentless pressure to support
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number of displaced
people
mostly due to war and political turmoil. The United Nations should introduce
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law that can allow
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generous countries to grant residency status to these
people
and provide them decent lifestyle.
For example
, Jordan, which has given shelter to over two million Syrians and Palestinian
people
, has created an ecosystem where they are utilizing the
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skills of these forced migrants to generate
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jobs both for
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and refugees alike.
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shelter
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their southern border to half a million Syrians. In Conclusion, I believe that every country across the globe should be welcoming to the displaced
people
from their continents and ease the border restriction to provide their basic human right of shelter and food. Every human being has a right to live with dignity and peacefully whether
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one is an unfortunate refugee or a citizen.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Refugees
  • Asylum seekers
  • Humanitarian aid
  • Integration
  • Multiculturalism
  • Economic impact
  • Public services
  • International law
  • Conventions relating to the status of refugees
  • Labor market
  • Cultural enrichment
  • Burden-sharing
  • Resettlement programs
  • Host country
  • Border security
  • Comprehensive policy
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