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Individuals should not be allowed to carry guns as it increases the crime and violence in the society.

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As
gun
 violence has been increasing in society for the
last
 few decades, it is often argued that
gun
 ownership should not be allowed to common people. I support
this
 view to a large extent since
this
 may prevent getting
guns
to
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 the wrong hands.
This
 essay will support my views and give a proper conclusion at the end. The one main reasons are if
guns
 were used by mentally challenged or criminals, the repercussions would be tremendous. Because of the ownership,
this
 allows the owner to use firearms for self -defence.
However
, currently, the opposite is true: there are many
gun
 violence incidents in the USA, where keeping a licenced
gun
 is very normal,
for example
. Since many culprits fire against innocents in order to escape from crime scenes.
Secondly
, freedom of
gun
 ownership is outdated when mankind at risk of being attacked.
In other words
, rarely do we see a country with
free
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gun
 policy is peaceful, and many sociologists have been requesting to the world leaders to stop issuing
gun
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 licence to citizens.
Although
 it may argue that these piece of equipment
also
 uses for entertainment, mostly
this
 may not be the case. To illustrate
this
, even young school children shoot at their fellow classmates with their parents’
guns
, so the depth of the issue is evident. In conclusion, I firmly support prohibiting access to
guns
 to citizens as it is essential to save
lives
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 of innocent people. It is predicted that if possession of
guns
 did not control , it would kill thousands of humans. do
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