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Some people work for the same organisation all their working life. Others think it is better to work for different organisations

#people #work #organisation #life #organisations
The issue has been widely discussed for decades. Some may say that staying at the
company
 is a wise choice,
however
, those who believe switching to
differ
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 organizations is even better. In
following
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 paragraphs, I will apply
the
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both ideas before offering my own viewpoints.
First
, there are many causes of the consequence of keeping to work for the same organization. The most important one among them is promotion and salary. Generally speaking, You would get more opportunities for stepping up, the longer you stay in a
company
 so that your
life
 quality will be protected. No mention that you may earn more pension when you are tired in the future.
For instance
, lots of people always spend their whole
life
 staying in
Japanese
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company
 for the same working culture which is illustrated above.
Nevertheless
, some people suppose that staying in the same place for a long time is risky especially for
young
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the young
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man
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.
Freshman
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 should take
chance
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 to learn more by changing a working place like a sponge. It helps to prepare themselves to confront the difficulties and to experience
the
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colorful
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life
. Leaving for a better
company
 will give you
simulation
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 to push you improved. It broadens your view if you get
chance
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 to
compete
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 the chance working in different countries. To sum up, staying in the same job would bring you stable growth, whereas I prefer to make
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 to change occupies to contact various of knowledge, interesting staff. I firmly believe that learning is the key way to gain a wonderful
life
.
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