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Some people think that secondary school should add international news as a subject; others think that it is a waste of valuable time. Discuss both views.

#people #school #news #waste #time
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The bar graph elucidates the
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 level of employees working eight different jobs. The pie chart illustrates diseases which
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 caused by
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. At a cursory glance, it is clearly seen that amount of
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. The major striking point here is that
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businessmen
 witnessed the top level of
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 with 70 vt while
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lectures
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 ranging nearly between 40% to 50% Regarding
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 illnesses,
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 are highly affected by
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health
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 figure, and with 18% and 15% film producers and doctors remained in the
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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