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Some people think it is acceptable to use
animals
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 for the benefit of
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the human
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human
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humans
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. Other people think it is wrong to exploit
animals
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 for human
purpose
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purposes
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. Right now people are divided over whether using
animals
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human purpose is acceptable or not. Personally, I strongly believe that using
animals
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human benefit is totally wrong. Exploiting
animals
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 for the sake of
human
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 is problematic in the following ways.
Firstly
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, some scientific experiments which use
animals
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 are completely inhuman.
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, there are studies like biology in which students dissect
animals
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 (rat, pigeon) to study their anatomy. Unfortunately, that
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 teaches
to
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students how to behave badly with
animals
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.
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, many hunters
who
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violates
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 the law and kill
animals
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. One illustration is, there are some
well known
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 brands
who
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 needs the skull and other animal parts to produce their product they hire hunters to kill the
animals
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 illegally for the purpose to obtain their body parts.
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, killing
animals
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 disturbs the whole ecosystem. If
the
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they
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 see the ecosystem, every species depends upon other species. If we are going to target one species it will put
negative
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a negative
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 impact on the surroundings. I would agree that
animals
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 are necessary when it comes to
conduct
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an experiment
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experiment
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experiments
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 on
new
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 medicine to improve human health.
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, there are some volunteers who are happy to experience the experiments and institutes are
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 happy to pay them too.
Recent
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,
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of, corona
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the corona
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corona virus
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coronavirus
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 vaccine is experienced by some volunteers. It means that there are other alternatives
which
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 replace the
animals
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. To conclude, utilising
animals
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 for the sake of humans is bad. Conducting experiments, killing
animals
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 to produce products will disturb the ecosystem.
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 of using
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 for research, we can use volunteers who can save the lives of innocent
animals
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