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More and more qualified people are moving from poor to rich countries to fill vacancies in specialist areas like engineering, computing and medicine. Some people believe that by encouraging the movement of such people, rich countries are stealing from poor countries. Others feel that this is only part of the natural movement of workers around the world. Do you agree or disagree?

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Migration of professionals like Engineers, IT executives and Doctors from developing
countries
 to developed
countries
 have become common these days, for better future. Many believe
this
 is not justifiable, as the cream of the poor community is taken away by rich counties. I think
this
 is true. Agreed,
people
 should have the liberty to choose where they want to settle down. But it should not happen that
people
 completely forget their hometowns. It is true that many poor societies lack basic necessities, which make life difficult and
this
 advanced region on the other side, provide a comfortable and lavish living. Still, professionals should respect their hometowns and benefit their homeland indirectly, by providing some sort of volunteering services online or through occasional visits.
Additionally
, prosperous states should
also
 support these underdeveloped
people
 by funding or through launching mega projects in these
countries
. When
people
 from other
countries
 work for their development and pay taxes as well, there should be some benefit to their
countries
 in return. Admittedly, there is no liability on these nations to help these nations, but to support humanity and to reduce poverty from the world, these steps from developed nations help predominantly. If
this
 trend will continue
further
, it would not be false to say that there will be two extremes on the planet, one which is too rich and one which is too poor. To conclude, there should be some limitations on all professionals who qualify from these
third
 world
countries
, to work for some years in their hometowns and
then
 they should be allowed to move to other
countries
.
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