The ownership of car should be restricted to one per family in order to reduce traffic congestion and pollution. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

A lot of communities believe that each family just have a ride in order to decrease movement jams and pollution.
This
writer agrees that the less transportation the community
have
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, the cleaner the environment is. First of all, truck reduction may enhance the wind to become clean and peaceful. When the pickup has been declined, there is no more congestion, the service will be wider and it may not threaten the air.
Moreover
, family contain less transport can save money to do other work.
For instance
, workers when they have their own limousine have to spend money to buy fossil fuel for it and it may be a waste of money.
Thus
, it is a significant thing to do to protect our lives in the modern era.
Secondly
, reducing the number of
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will reduce waste of the toxic gas in the breeze.
As well as
transport in the world,
auto
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also
waste gas which threatens the pressure
such
as carbon dioxide, and sulfur dioxide and these gases may cause breeze pollution in society.
However
, because of encouraging auto reduction, the wind would be safer and cleaner for people.Nowadays, a lot of companies produce electric pickup to save the environment and reduce pollution and shipment jams.So, society has to follow and accept the rules to make the world become healthier. In conclusion, the air and atmosphere are now threatening and it is
also
a significant problem in the world. the act of reducing
limousine
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is one of the most important things in
this
era, it
also
reduces service jams and makes the air cleaner.
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vocabulary
It is important to use accurate vocabulary and expressions. Phrases like 'ride,' 'pickup,' and 'limousine' should be replaced with 'car' or 'vehicle' to avoid confusion.
elaboration
Elaborate more on some points. For instance, explain how reducing cars can lead to a cleaner environment in more detail, and consider potential counterarguments.
sentence structure
Try to refine your grammar and sentence structure for better clarity. Some sentences are a bit awkward or unclear, which could detract from your argument.
task response
Your essay addresses the task by discussing both traffic congestion and pollution, offering solutions, and incorporating relevant examples.
structure
You have a clear introduction and conclusion, which frame your argument well.

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