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some people say it's waste of time when plan future. its more important to focus on present. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #waste #time #plan #future #focus
In
this
 fastest growing
world
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 time management and setting
future
goals
 is the key of success.
Although
 sometimes it is
also
 useless
,
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 when
people
 make a plan only and did not work on it. If asked, I agree with
this
 statement to a large extent and ample the reason for that explained in
further
 paragraphs. There are several reasons for that and
first
 is, masses think an enormous about
future
,
thus
 they could not concentrate on present activities. Sometimes it creates a hurdle situation for them while they could not achieve their
goals
, and feel anxiety, stress.
For instance
, one of the surveys conducted in the USA state that, there are 10% of citizen attempt suicide when they did not achieve their
goals
 or 50% of folks suffer from hypertension and stress.
As a result
, sometimes it creates a nuisance in our life when
people
 could not work on their pre-plan. Another reason for my support is,
people
 can solely make assumptions for the
future
plans
 without hard effort, it might not possible;
hence
, present decision is adequate impactful than
future
 plan. To illustrate, in one of the surveys taken online in India, there are 90% of pupils make reading
plans
 before exams, but merely 20% of students succeed,
therefore
 making the only strategy is not worthwhile whereas they could not follow it.
However
, there is
also
 some brighter side.
Firstly
, if the community knows their
future
goals
then
 they might work more properly and accurate.
Secondly
,
people
 do not waste tremendous time on another activity and focused on their
plans
. To conclude,
although
 making
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future
plan
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 is always beneficial.
However
, adolescents nowadays merely make
plans
 or did not make effort to follow them, so it is wasteful as per my opinion.
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