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Students are becoming more and more reliant on the Internet. While the Internet is convenient, it has many negative effects and its use for educational purposes should be restricted. How far do you agree with this statement?

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In
this
 age, there has been a passionate argument that
students
 depend more on the
internet
 in
education
. Many people thought that the
internet
 has many benefits while there are others
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that
is
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it
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 has many drawbacks. From my perspective, I believe that the
internet
 plays a great role in
educational
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 process. The following paragraphs discuss both advantages and disadvantages of using the
internet
 in
education
. On the one hand, there are many advantages to
internet
 usage in
education
.
First
, the
internet
 may help the student to increase their knowledge and information by using different websites, engines and databases.
Therefore
,
this
 will help them in their research papers and assignments.
Secondly
, the
internet
 may assist the learning process and enhance
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education
.
For example
, in
the
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bad weather or any negative circumstances, teachers can hold an online class and let the
students
 submit their homework online.
Consequently
, by continuing the learning process, the
education
 will achieve its goals.
On the other hand
, the
internet
also
 has some disadvantages on
education
. Despite the benefits of using the
internet
,
students
 may not focus on their subjects. They
,
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 might use it for other purposes
such
 as watching
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a movie
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movies
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, playing games, or using social media.
In addition
, some
students
 or their
family
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families
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 may suffer from the high cost
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of
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internet
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the internet
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 especially if it is complementary
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 the school.
Finally
, even though
internet
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the internet
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 recently is very important in
education
, parents should
but
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 some restrictions while using the
internet
 to ensure the quality of learning. In conclusion, after
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 both sides of the argument it is not hard to see that the benefits of using the
internet
 in
education
 outweigh the drawbacks. The disadvantages can be reduced by controlling and educating the
students
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 to use the
internet
 in a proper way.
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  • accessibility
  • independent learning
  • critical thinking
  • excessive reliance
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  • problem-solving
  • overly dependent
  • diversity
  • perspectives
  • global cultures
  • enriching
  • unrestricted
  • information overload
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  • credible sources
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  • innovative
  • pedagogy
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