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Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Many
languages
 go into
extinction
 on an annual basis. While many would argue, and I completely disagree, that it is not essential as life will be better with fewer
dailects
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dialects
 across the globe.
This
 essay will explain
further
. On the
one
 hand, some persons are of the opinion that having fewer
languages
 implies that the world would become more peaceful.
However
, I disagree with
this
 statement. They are of the belief that with
this
 trend, people from different walks of life would communicate and better understand each other.
For example
, a word can mean different ideas in various
languages
, while it might be offensive in
one
, it may not be in the other, a report said. In a bid to eradicate the conflict that might arise from using several
languages
 , some would opine that the
extinction
 of some
languages
 would be beneficial to all.
On the other
hand
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 I do not agree that the death of a language is not important because
this
 is what defines an individual's
culture
. Language is an important aspect of
one
's tradition, and its
extinction
 implies the death of that
culture
 over time.
For instance
, according to the daily times' magazine, the
loss
 of
one
's
dailect
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dialect
 is the major contributing factor to the
loss
 of their tradition over the years. Due to the fact that the death of
one
's language is directly related to the
loss
 of their
culture
. I do not agree with the fact that the
extinction
 of some
languages
are
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 not crucial. In conclusion,
although
 some individuals would opine that life will be better with fewer
languages
 as it helps reduce the rate of interpersonal conflicts, I do not concur
to
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this
 claim as
this
loss
 would lead to the fading out of a
culture
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Linguistic diversity
  • Cultural heritage
  • Language extinction
  • Communication barrier
  • Linguistic imperialism
  • Endangered languages
  • Language revitalization
  • Monolingual
  • Multilingual
  • Language preservation
  • Homogenization
  • Language policy
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Intangible heritage
  • Indigenous languages
  • Globalization
  • Dialects
  • Localization
  • Language documentation
  • Digital archiving
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