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There is a good deal of evidence that increasing car use is contributing to global warming and having other undesirable effects on people’s health and well-being. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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 ownership is associated with different environmental and health issues,
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 as global warming, lung cancer, and stress. Even though the convenience of possessing a
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 has made it nearly an inexorable trend, there are measures
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 governments may take to discourage unnecessary
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use
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. The
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 and most effective measure could be to make it expensive to have and
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 a
car
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.
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 measure can be implemented by taxing heavily on
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 buying, congested
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, and gas consumption. By doing so, people could start contemplating reducing their
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use
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, particularly for unnecessary excursions.
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, there is a drawback of
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 approach it is frequently the lower residents will suffer from the increased cost. The poor may have to cut some vital trips because of the fiscal burden, whereas the rich ones would have the ability to maintain their convenience from automobile
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.
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,
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 measure may be robust but not fair to the poor. A different way to dissuade individuals from using their automobiles is to encourage them
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 alternative transfers,
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 as trains, buses, and bicycles. Evidence has demonstrated that cities,
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 as Tokyo and Paris, where more effective public transport systems are offered,
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use
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 prices are reduced, and roads are less congested. People will be willing to
use
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 public transfers when they are almost more convenient than driving their cars.
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, authorities could spend more on infrastructure and transport system design and construction to offer decent and competitive options. In conclusion, increasing the cost of having and using a
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 might be an effective way to reduce
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 usage.
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, improving and encouraging public transport may be the better and more sustainable way to achieve
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 objective.

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