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living in a country where you have to speak foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. to what extend do you agree or disagree

Immigration is constantly on a rise. It is undeniable that many people migrate to developed countries to improve their standard of living or getting higher education. I support
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 statement that speaking an overseas
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 in a foreign territory creates serious issues in practical life. By analyzing, that people faced difficulty in socializing and getting employment has proven
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. Let`s begin by looking at communication problems that arise on moving to a foreign state.
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, many Pakistani students go abroad for having professional degrees to build their
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. But unfortunately unfamiliar with the mother tongue of the outside nation cause serious social matters
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 as they are not able to communicate with other students and convey their message in a proper way leads to
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 situation to make friends.
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, no one present to share problems
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 them alone, frustrated and homesick.
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, it is commonly seen that a number of society members migrate to other countries to explore employment opportunities.
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, it is noticeable that people always face trouble in getting
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 of work in an overseas country. Take an example of an underdeveloped community that travel to developed states for work to acquire high salaries. But sadly it creates complications for them
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 as
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 they have to learn
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 to obtain a piece of work.
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, they cannot stand for the violation of their rights because they are unable to understand
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 and regulations of that country written in their own
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. To summarize, unknown
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 is a great barrier
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 communication and have a negative impact on practical life. It is extremely recommended to take
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language
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 course before making a plan to move abroad to improve lifestyle.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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