Some people think that universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many strategies and measures have been put forward in decades to promote fairness in
gender
. Some people argue that
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tertiary education should allocate the same quantity of learning positions in all
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to women and men, while I think it is not a good proposal.  
Firstly
,
gender
equality in education may lead to
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distribution of resources in the university. Fundamentally, universities are established to cultivate talents on the basis of high-level but limited instructors and facilities. And it is unrealistic and irrational to choose equal males and females
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each
subject
considering the natural disparities in attributes and strengths.
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, the boys may perform better in disciplines like artificial intelligence, and the enforced participants through
gender
equality in
this
subject
, who are more difficult to learn and may even give up
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, is likely to waste educational resources.
This
obviously not an efficient and effective approach to foster certified talents.   One more argument is that the over-emphasized
gender
view in high-level education may decrease the enthusiasm of
students
. Actually, they could acquire much more
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and skills, as well as exhibiting more creativity when they enjoy what they learn. Personally speaking, I was addicted to science in my freshman's year, and I
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eager to stay up at night to research and do
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which indeed facilitated me in learning
this
subject
faster than my peers.
Students
, the core components in the university, unlike the time in the primary and secondary schools, contain more autonomy and choice for what they learn, and there is no doubt that a more appealing
subject
for individuals will drive them
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better with a stronger inner passion.
Therefore
, high-level educators should be aware of
this
fact and raise
students
with more respect to both
students
and objectivity.   In conclusion, high-level schools should not stiffly demand the same number of girls as boys in every
subject
.
Instead
, more attention should be paid to personal strengths and interests to raise qualified talents.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender equality
  • inclusive environment
  • natural disparities
  • enforcing equal numbers
  • merit-based admission
  • qualified candidates
  • gender quotas
  • undermine
  • academic standards
  • guidance and support
  • societal biases
  • numeric equality
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