Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Contemporarily, commercial
advertisement
is considered as stimulating us to purchase merchandise that
are
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unnecessary,
while
other buyers claim that advertising helps us perceive a variety of useful stuff. I would contend that the main ambition of
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is that may enhance our
live style
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. Advertising
lead
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us to
the
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modern life with
variety
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of merchandise to get rid of the old odds. As the advertise commonly exist on the Internet and even
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, which
is boosts
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the product to be more
popular
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. Not only
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the advertising agency bombard the media, but
also
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our awareness.
For example
, thanks to the vape
advertisement
in
early
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2000s. That
make
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vaping
save
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millions from
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cancer. To advertise the products the company gets to be aware of how much the world’s technology is developing. To be more specific, Because of the revolution, our life has changed day by day.
The customers
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get to know more about how the world has developed
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all the advertisements
on
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mass media. The more we have
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about
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technology the more we have diverse life-changing inventions.
Due to
the development, we have to be thankful for the invention of AI. The customers who
buying
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goods via
the
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social media.
Such
a miracle way that many
agency
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of advertising can use all of the famous platforms
such
as Instagram, Facebook, Twitter,
ect
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etc
. On the one hand, it is likely that
advertise
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force us to purchase
stuffs
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stuff
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that
truly
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superfluous consumption. If we work and just meet our
demand
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we will be extremely careful.
Thus
, there is no point in buying similar appliances to waste our money.
Moreover
, the conglomerate dominated the market and celebs, influencers, and
also
kols. They
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frequently exaggerate the usefulness
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their ads.
On The other hand
, I believe that
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also
transfer
truly
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meaning of their products and help us reach
our
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profit that we
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. In Conclusion, I deem that
although
there are a lot of advertisements that fallacy, and cause us into
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.
While
there a variety of
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may improve our lives.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • persuade
  • manipulative
  • unnecessary
  • excessive
  • artificial needs
  • desires
  • consumers
  • oversaturation
  • impulse buying
  • financial problems
  • inform
  • educate
  • features
  • benefits
  • innovations
  • raise awareness
  • social issues
  • positive behavior
  • enrich
  • well-being
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