The proportion of elderly people in some societies is increasing rapidly.Do you think the negative effect of such trend outweigh the positive effect?

These days, the

percentage

of older people is rising rapidly in some countries. In my opinion, the negative

effects

of

this

trend outweigh the positive

effects

, and in

this

essay, I will explain why. On one hand, the

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population makes

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contributions to their communities, because a number of the elderly engages in voluntary work after

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. In fact, values nurtured by voluntary work,

such

as solidarity, reciprocity, mutual trust, belonging and empowerment, contribute significantly to the well-being of the citizens and communities.

For example

, some volunteer programs assign older volunteers who serve as efficient tutors by making use of their experience to

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school

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, which helps to connect them with others, develop

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, and improve school functioning, all of which are essential for the individual and community well-being.

On the other hand

, an increasing number of the elderly places a greater burden on

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care

system, because the elderly generally experience chronic diseases,

such

as cancer, diabetes, and cardiovascular diseases. Specifically,

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the elderly, who are treated for chronic diseases that are rarely cured completely, account for a greater

percentage

of the population, a huge amount of

health

care

provision and expenditure in hospitals is spent on those people, which causes

health

care

costs to increase. What is more, the higher

percentage

of

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older people and declining fertility rate cause the workforce to decrease, which results in

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wage inflation that leads to a rise in the cost of living

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As we have seen, the higher

percentage

of the elderly have both positive and negative

effects

.

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However

, it has negative

effects

on a broader range of areas, from the

health

care

system to the economy, so I believe that

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effects

of

this

trend outweigh the positive

effects

.