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Some people believe that family is more important than friends. To what extent do you agree and disagree?

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There are some people who think that family is highly significant than
friends
.
However
, I personally believe that both of them are equally essential in one’s
life
. Family support is essential especially, when growing up, whereas
friends
 support require when a person reaches his teenage years and from there on wards.
Firstly
, during the early years of
life
, children need to be nursed by parents or elders in the family. They could provide not only emotional needs, but financial and educational aspects as well. To illustrate
this
, blood relatives often offer,
for instance
, the best possible facilities: better home, school, medical service, food and so on. If they did not receive these supports, they would end up in a pathetic situation, and rarely do we see
this
 nowadays.
Thus
, I convinced that parents and relatives play a key role in everyone’s
life
.
Friends
,
on the other hand
, they play a crucial role in most of mankind’
life
. They tend to support: while studying, searching for a job, and having a difficult time in
life
.
Additionally
, it is often noted that there are some occasions when they are the only one to whom we share intimate problems.
Although
 some may argue that friendship that even destroys one’s
life
, mostly the relation is harmless.
Therefore
, I think that strong and healthy friendship is an asset. In conclusion, people have different opinions on who weigh more significant in humans
life
 whether it is family or
friends
. I strongly believe that both of them are equally important as hardly replace their role in our lives by others.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bond
  • support
  • unconditional love
  • shared values
  • mutual understanding
  • trust
  • emotional well-being
  • interdependence
  • societal norms
  • companionship
  • loyalty
  • advice
  • experiences
  • mentorship
  • trustworthy
  • reliable
  • reliable
  • cherish
  • strengthen
  • deepen
  • attach importance to
  • prioritize
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