There has been a dramatic growth in the number of people studying at universities in the last few decades. While some people see this as a positive trend which raises the general level of education within the community, others fear that it is lowering the quality of education. What are the advantages and disadvantages of the increase in student numbers at university?

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recent decades, there has been a tremendous increase in the
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universities
.It is perceived as a beneficial phenomenon by a few individuals as
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supports the rise in the common standard of education in a society ,whereas, some individuals opine that it is decreasing the educational value.
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this
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universities
is advantageous in two ways.
To begin
with,
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produces a lot of graduates
thus
increasing the percentage of youth with a degree in a community.
Besides
this
, education make these people give a chance to work for the development of their native country by becoming
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and
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develop many
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products.
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educated in a field, graduates obtain
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and try to market their ideas.
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economy for themselves and for the nation.
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, the major downside of having a lot of folks at higher educational institutions is
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in the fees of the courses delivered.That means, in order to accumulate and provide services for all the joining ones , the
universities
increase the admission fare for each course.
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, if more
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people are willing to join a course , it is obvious that there will be a huge demand for it and in order to encash
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an institution will raise the fee amount which leads to the elimination of the poor to join that educational organization.
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, those training organizations have to hire
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number
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teach
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the batches and sometimes they may hire unworthy candidates at
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and cheat the pupils. In conclusion, there is
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of growth in the
number
of individuals trying to step into
universities
.
This
change has both benefits and a few disadvantages.
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