Governments should spend more money on education than on recreation and sports. Do you agree or disagree?

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These days Governments must disburse

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of money on education than on

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and entertainment.

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because there are a lot of benefits from it. If the Government expend

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education, it is beneficial to their own country’s economy and it will drive the country to a developed country.

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, As India is a developing country, if more people are educated and work, especially poor people, the country’s economy will reach its peak.

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should be spent on

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and recreation. It benefits one’s health and people can have high carrier opportunities in

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field.

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, If the government can provide food, required kits and basic amenities for those who are good at

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can play in Olympics or international level tournaments,

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they can get settled in their carrier and for those who were not

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at least have good health. I strongly agree that if

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on education

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 5.5

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Governments should spend more money on education than on recreation and sports. Do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

Working from home is better than office. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The statistics show that prior to the year 1960, less than half of one percent of adolescents had been vegetarians.

The pictures below show how tomato ketchup is made. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

Successful sport person can earn great deal of money more than the people in other important profession. Some people think this is fully justifies were other thinks it feel unfair. Discuss both view and give you opinion.

In many countries, the government prioritises economic growth above all other concerns. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this.