The charts illustrate the amount of spending by percentages in various areas for daily living in Canada and Poland and comparison of life events in these two countries with estimated global average previously age 35.

The charts illustrate the amount of spending by percentages in various areas for daily living in Canada and Poland and comparison of life events in these two countries with estimated global average previously age 35.
The charts illustrate the amount of spending by percentages in various areas for daily living in
Canada
and
Poland
and
comparison
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of life events in these two countries with
estimated
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global average previously
age
35
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. Regarding the proportion of spending their gains, people in
Canada
invest one-fifth of total compensation on Leisure and clothing at 20% and 19% respectively.
Then
, the Canadians equally spend approximately less than a fifth of total proceeds on housing, food, transport and studies between 14% and 16%.
On the contrary
, the citizens from
Poland
use their budgets on studying nearly half of
total
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earnings at 43%, which is the largest proportion of expenditure. It is followed by expenses on transportation merely over a quarter of their earnings.
Then
, they spend less on
the
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other area
such
as housing, food, leisure and clothing between 5% and 11%. Regarding the average
age
of life events,
the
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Canadians make choices on leaving home and buying prior to 20 years of
age
, which is much earlier than those from
Poland
at around 25.
Moreover
, compared to the global average, both
from
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Canada
and
Poland
represent no significant difference in the
age
of marriage. In summary, the people in
Poland
spend the majority of their income on studying
while
those in
Canada
spend more evenly on various areas
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