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The charts illustrate the amount of spending by percentages in various areas for daily living in Canada and Poland and comparison of life events in these two countries with estimated global average previously age 35.

The charts illustrate the amount of spending by percentages in various areas for daily living in Canada and Poland and comparison of life events in these two countries with estimated global average previously age 35.
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The charts illustrate the amount of spending by percentages in various areas for daily living in
Canada
 and
Poland
 and
comparison
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 of life events in these two countries with
estimated
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 global average previously
age
35
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. Regarding the proportion of spending their gains, people in
Canada
 invest one-fifth of total compensation on Leisure and clothing at 20% and 19% respectively.
Then
, the Canadians equally spend approximately less than a fifth of total proceeds on housing, food, transport and studies between 14% and 16%.
On the contrary
, the citizens from
Poland
 use their budgets on studying nearly half of
total
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 earnings at 43%, which is the largest proportion of expenditure. It is followed by expenses on transportation merely over a quarter of their earnings.
Then
, they spend less on
the
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other area
such
 as housing, food, leisure and clothing between 5% and 11%. Regarding the average
age
 of life events,
the
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Canadians make choices on leaving home and buying prior to 20 years of
age
, which is much earlier than those from
Poland
 at around 25.
Moreover
, compared to the global average, both
from
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Canada
 and
Poland
 represent no significant difference in the
age
 of marriage. In summary, the people in
Poland
 spend the majority of their income on studying
while
 those in
Canada
 spend more evenly on various areas
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words canada, poland, age with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrate" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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