The internet does more harm to society than the TV and the other media. Therefore, the government should take steps to control the use of the internet. Do you agree with this view? Why/why not?
Internet
does more harm to the
society than Correct article usage
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the
traditional media.
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To begin
with, internet
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the internet
become
everyday essential only after Change the verb form
becomes
year
2000. Before that Change the article
the year
people
had to rely on TV, radio and newspapers for the
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information
. Lives
of the Correct article usage
The lives
people
were in
much slower pace back Change preposition
at in
then
. Now in today's world people
are so into the internet
. Firstly
there's no control over information
. So anyone can find all the information
on how to make bomb
step by step just browsing over the Fix the agreement mistake
bombs
internet
. In recent times almost all the damages done by the ISIS terrorists all over the world is by individual planning and executing rather in
a single Change preposition
than in
center
. Because Change the spelling
centre
people
has
access to Change the verb form
have
information
, can order anything online and execute a plan individually.
Furthermore
, most of information
about the lives of the Add an article
the information
people
are exposed. So criminals can utilize this
information
to hack their accounts, kidnap or even to
murder. Recent criminal testimonials proved that. Multinational companies analyze the searching patterns of the Fix the infinitive
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people
and target their advertising to feed onto that. So this
usually ends up pushing people
to buy more and more. Google and Facebook both accepted that they have sold their user information
with the other companies.
There are
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is
lot
of fake news and lots of false ideologies spread through Change the article
a lot
internet
. Add an article
the internet
As a result
, people
become victims of these especially
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,especially
younger
generation. Correct article usage
the younger
People
become more and more obsessed with the
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so called
influencers Add a hyphen
so-called
now a days
thanks to the Correct the word
nowadays
internet
. Although
there are real personalities, there are tons of shallow personalities who are posting tons of posts with photos and videos their
lifestyles where Change preposition
of their
people
tend to believe it's the reality. So eventually younger
generation will choose high-spending glamorous Correct article usage
the younger
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lifestyles
life styles
over simpler lives. Kardashians family who got Correct your spelling
lifestyles
world renowned
for noting Add a hyphen
world-renowned
productive
is the best example.
In conclusion, the government should intervene and introduce Replace the word
productivity
censorships
for the content. There should be controls over the authenticity of the contents published.Fix the agreement mistake
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