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Band 6.5

Your local public library wants to make improvements to their services and facilities. In order to get ideas from the public, they have asked library users to send them suggestions in writing. Write a letter to the librarian in your letter -describe what you like about the library -say what you don’t like -make suggestions for improvements

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Dear sir, I am writing
this
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 letter to share my insights regarding the improvements which are executed in our
library
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 related to services
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 facilities. Our
library
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 has the perfect combination of modern and traditional values. It contains
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 range of books which are preferred by young to old people.
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, the way AI is utilised in arranging the books in the system is magnificent. There are a few things which need your attention.
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, the wifi is not properly working which causes inconvenience to the users
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non-availability
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 of proper internet connection, people are suffering to search the books which are required by them.
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, the furniture of the
library
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 is getting outdated, and some chairs are broken which need to be replaced. It would be appreciated if good quality connection wifi is installed in the
library
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, and old furniture should be replaced by modern furniture which includes replacing the broken chairs as well. Thank you for your consideration in
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 matter. Best regards, Sahil sahi
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coherence cohesion
To improve coherence and cohesion, consider using more connecting words and phrases to ensure better flow between paragraphs. Additionally, check for grammatical errors and varied sentence structures to enhance readability.
task achievement
To fully achieve the task, provide more specific and practical suggestions for improvements. This shows a deeper engagement with the topic.
task achievement
The letter has a respectful and polite tone, appropriate for the purpose of writing to a librarian.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are well-structured and suitable for a formal letter.
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