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some people argued that having money makes people happy. some says that having too much money only bring problems. do you agree or disagree?

#people #money
Nowadays,
money
 is an essential part of human life, without cash they could not survive in
this
 exorbitant world;
however
 few people pretend that property can make people happy while counterpart argues that enormous
fund
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 solely brought problems. I disagree with the latter statement and ample reasons for that discussed
further
. Out of all the reasons, the foremost one is,
money
 is an inevitable need for
crowd
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 because they can live a lavish lifestyle and fulfil their all requirements due to enough wealth.
In addition
, if the masses have adequate currency
then
 they can give better education to their children, which can improve their future careers. To illustrate, in India, there is 50% of adolescents often attempt crime because of lack of salary,
therefore
 enough payment can give happiness with a good lifestyle and education.
Furthermore
, if folks have
money
then
 their children did not go throw starvation.
Moreover
, they can
also
 cure acute diseases
such
 as corona, cancer because the cost of
this
 disease treatment is often high,
thus
 they can provide medical care in a facilitated way.
For instance
, in my home country India, every year above 1,00,000 society die because they do not have
adequate
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wage
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wages
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 for treatment.
However
, sometimes if
community
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 have a lot of
money
 that time
it
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also
 brings problems towards their family
such
 as children from wealthy families often attempt crime for just enjoyment because they have
also
 strong political connections, which can save them from punishment. To conclude, having significant
money
 is always beneficial for people because they can easily acquire better education, lifestyle and hospitality and
this
 indirectly give them joy.
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