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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary schools rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Lately,learning other languages by offspring has been a subject of argument. Some professionals accepted
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off
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 good option for offspring to learn a foreign language from elementary level
instead
 of high school.
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another dialect
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 from
primary
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 level than the drawbacks.
To begin
 with, kids who are taught other speech from their
first class
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 widely opportune to have mastered the language effectively before gaining entrance to high school as most children adapt to earning naturally at
tender
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 age.
For example
,French
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subjects
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 are taught from
first
 grade to higher classes in most learning centres in Nigeria which helps
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the majority
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 of schoolers to speak the language fluently outside their mother's country.
Secondly
,teens who learn and speak other languages excellently are exposed to other cultures or
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,
also
 have
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opportunity
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to
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 foreign countries.
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 ,Nigeria graduates who are bilingual will have better chances to apply to job offers to other nations and earn better income in hard currency. In conclusion, learning
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 dialect at
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 stage of education is
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great
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 idea. It will help and
progess
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progress
process
such
 person future with loads of opportunity than problems.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cognitive development
  • Enhance
  • Problem-solving skills
  • Pronunciation
  • Mimic
  • Native-like accent
  • Cultural awareness
  • Sensitivity
  • Exposure
  • Resource allocation
  • Qualified
  • Effective instruction
  • Overwhelmed
  • Curriculum
  • Undermining
  • Mother tongue
  • Prioritizing
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