In a public-funded health care system people who are willing to pay for the best and fastest treatment should be able to do so. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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Health
care
is one of the vital sectors of any country. The government
health
care
system is public aided by the tax they pay to the government,
however
, it does not mean that any random person can pay huge fees in order to gain access to early and reliable treatment. I completely disagree with his thought and will be elaborating my opinion
further
in
this
essay in an exemplary manner.
To begin
with,
health
care
in any part of the world should be easily accessible to common people as it is the right of
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every individual. No doubt there will be endless lines for the consultation of doctors at the government
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but it does not mean that those who
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money should be entertained foremost. Only medical emergencies should gain priority and
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of them must be seen in order of appointments.
For instance
, I have seen a patient who was critically ill
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not admitted
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the hospital and another person was taken just because he paid more money for the ICU bed.
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he died at the hospital in few hours.
In addition
to
this
, money should never be the reason
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compromising public
health
. All citizens and residents should be treated equally regardless of their financial status.
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, I have heard many people in many parts of
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had already booked the ICU beds in case of emergencies, ultimately leaving behind
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place for actually deserving patients.
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care
system should always play a fair role in
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of society, which will help
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the trust between doctors and patients.
Nevertheless
,
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not doctors always responsible authorities at
high
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level should be held accountable for the injustice. To conclude, In my opinion,
medical
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system has a dignified role to play. Patients must be treated as earliest as possible irrespective of their financial situation and
this
enforced strictly in all
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health
centers
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especially in the
public funded
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