Using a computer every day can have more negative than positive effects on children. Do you agree or disagree?”

Computer usage has increased in recent years among
children
. Some people opine that using
computers
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good for
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of
children
however
others consider that it may affect them negatively. In
this
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we will discuss the merits as well as demerits of computer usage among
younger
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generation and I believe that it is necessary for kids to learn
computers
but
overusage
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overuse
over usage
is harmful
for
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their brains.
Computers
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changed the world in a better way and more so in
the
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recent times for
children
. During the ongoing pandemic and lockdown lasting for more than a year schools and colleges have been shut and academics have taken a backseat. In these times educational institutions have started online classes for students to stay in touch with the subjects and
computers
have
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played a big role for kids to stay at home and learn.
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the availability of internet services
have
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helped
children
to improve their general knowledge and skills.
However
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there has been
a
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abuse of
this
technology
also
. Most
of
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children
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indulge in playing games, watching movies which
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decreased
there
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attention span.
Furthermore
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internet
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they are falling prey to bad content like pornography and fake news. Increased screen time has led them to
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in physical activity with
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in obesity and early onset of diseases in kids. In conclusion,
computers
has
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been boon to
this
generation and at the same time bane
also
. In my opinion parents and teachers have a big role to play in
this
by educating and helping them.
Thus
in my opinion learning
computers
are good if utilised well .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Screen time
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Physical inactivity
  • Cognitive development
  • Internet addiction
  • Cyberbullying
  • Inappropriate content
  • Digital literacy
  • Virtual learning environments
  • Parental controls
  • Moderation
  • Online safety
  • Tech-savvy
  • E-learning
  • Information technology
  • Eye strain
  • Social skills
  • Multitasking
  • Interactive education
  • Health repercussions
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