Some countries today have passed laws against smoking tobacco in public buildings such as offices and restaurants. Other countries have no intention of doing this.

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is appears
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that people ought to donate a fixed amount of their money to assist
charity
.
This
idea would surely be acceptable to most people for several reasons. I will explain them in
this
essay. One of the biggest
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is that it helps to decrease poverty
from
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the world. There are different non-profit communities that are focusing on different burdens.
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of them have the goal to reduce poverty by helping those who live in underdeveloped countries.
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The donation
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will support
such
organization
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to buy essential things for
deprived
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family
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. The recent survey shows that deprivation has been reduced over the
last
few years because of the
donation
and
charity
.
Secondly
, many animals and plants are endangered.
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is surely our duty to protect
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because
the
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deforestation is leading to many
enviromental
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environmental
changes
such
as global warming and desertification. By giving the
donation
, forest and habitat will be protected by the
charity
and non-profit
organizations
that work for
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and animals.
For example
, one of the
organizations
that protect
rainforest
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has already planted over twenty million trees all over the world. It seems that
donation
doesn't have to be
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amount of money. By
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we mean that donating small
amount
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money
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to
organizations
will help them to make changes for poor people and animals. It might be said that
charity
helps
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with their problems, but it doesn't
fugure
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figure
out the causes of that problem.
However
, in recent years
charity
and non-profit
organizations
have been trying to figure out the causes of the problem. To conclude, it seems that contributing to
charity
may lessen poverty and it supports
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society in different ways.
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