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It is generally believed that the Internet is an excellent means of communication but some people suggest that it may not be the best place to find information. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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I am writing to inform you about Mr Thomas Sheffield, who has undergone PPM implantation. He is going to
discharge
 from the hospital on 25 th January 2021. He requires
further
 care and management. I hope you are aware of his hospitalisation due to giddiness on 21st January 2020. At the time of admission, he was diagnosed with a complete heart block;
therefore
, a permanent pacemaker was successfully implanted on him by our cardiology team. Presently, surgical wound healing on progress, sterile strips is intact,and an island is applied. His pain is minimal and analgesic is advised if necessary. His PPMis checked for its rhythm, pacing, and stet rate of 70 beats per minute. His lab reports are within the normal limit. His current status and lab values were discussed with the cardiologist as well. After discussing the patient
discharge
 plan with the patient and family, they are willing for
discharge
.
Additionally
, he was informed and discussed his
discharge
 plan and medications. After
discharge
, he needs to be monitored for his level of pain and a remote transmission device needs to be ready to monitor him.
Moreover
, Mr Sheffield is reviewed with our cardiologist after one week in order to inspect the surgical site. Should you have enquiries, do not hesitate to contact me
Discharge
 Nurse
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