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In many developing nations, the rush to become industrialized has created major problems with air and water quality. What are the problems that this has brought about and offer some solutions to these problems?

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Nowadays, economic growth plays a huge role all over the country.Because of that construction of
Industry
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,
factory
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 tends to
increased
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 in order to elevate the wealthiness of the country.
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, it causes many problems to the
environment
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 as well as for society. In
this
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 essay, I would discuss the issues of establishing a
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 and how to tackle those problems.
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, developing an industrialized
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 in a nation may be considered as
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 approach to tackle the country economic growth. But we have to consider the impact of building
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industriesindustry
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. Primarily, it causes air and water pollution.
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, the release of a large amount of co2 content from the
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 disturbs the
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 as well as the human being.Especially those who are with
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 problems.
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, climate change plays a huge role because of air pollution.Due to
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, farmers were suffering to know the right harvest season for the crops.
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, we can overcome these drawbacks by following some measures.
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, the government should allocate separate
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 or isolated
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regions
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 for
construction
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 of
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factory
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,
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industry
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industries
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, and so on . And to that, the
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 should be far from the people living
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.Planting up more trees may
also
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 help to decrease air pollution.
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, if we plant more trees around the
industry
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,co2 content release from the
industry
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 are absorbed by plants. So that it results in less impact
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 the
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. In conclusion, building up an Industrialized
environment
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 has a major impact on humans health.So government should take necessary steps like raising
industry
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 in the remote
area
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 should be followed.
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