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The world is consuming natural resources faster than they can be renewed. Therefore, it is important that products are made to last. Governments should discourage people from constantly buying more up to date or fashionable products. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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Over the
last
 30
years
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 the West has witnessed the East strive for a larger 'piece of the economic pie, aiming for similar living standards to the EU and US.
This
 has increased pressure on natural resources and prompted suggestions for governments to limit consumption.
This
 idea is severely flawed because it reduces product
safety
 and building
products
 to
last
 would harm the poor.
Firstly
, the suggestion that governments should discourage consumers from purchasing 'up to date
products
' would eliminate the opportunity to improve their
safety
.
This
 is because as technology improves, new discoveries can be used to increase their utility. Take
for example
 the car industry, where technology
such
 as ABS brakes, airbags, seat belts have all been derived from a constant flow of improvements.
Therefore
 if the authorities were permitted to limit purchases, car companies would be reluctant to invest in new features, and
safety
 would never improve.
Secondly
, it is true we are consuming more, through ever-increasing populations,
nevertheless
, the argument that '
products
 should be made to
last
' is redundant. If
products
 were built stronger they would be more expensive.
This
 would harm the less wealthy consumer,
furthermore
 with modern technology these
products
 can often be recycled at a later date anyway. Glass, plastic, paper, batteries, and even mobile phones are now collected to be re-purposed, reused and recycled.
Therefore
 durable
products
 are unnecessary and would harm lower-income demographics. To conclude it is clear that if the public sector were allowed to discourage consumption it would harm product improvements and ultimately consumer
safety
. Meddling with product durability would most likely harm the poor.
Therefore
 I am strongly opposed to both of these notions.
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