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Once children enter school, teachers have more influence on their intellectual and social developments than parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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Children enter the school at
a
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 innocent age of 4.Once they enter the school, their attitude and behavioural developments are carried away by the
teachers
.I do agree
this
 is some extent.The essay will discuss more
about
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the statement. Children are quick learners.They grab the
things
 into
the
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their mind very soon.The reason being, they don't have any other thoughts and are more
receptacle
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 in the tender age.As they start going to school, the different phase of life starts.They spend most of
the
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 time with their peers and
teachers
.They slowly get to expose themselves to a wide range of
things
 inside and outside of the class. Since in the class they are controlled by
teachers
, they get acquainted with the
things
teacher
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 teaches
to
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them.To exemplify, one of my
neighbours
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neighbour's
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child
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children
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 does drawing all day as she is told by her teacher that she is very good at it.
This
 statement and encouragement of the teacher
motivates
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 her and she is now a good artist. At the same time,
my
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i
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 do
agree
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this
 to some extent and not completely because it
also
 depends on how the
child
 reacts.Every
child
 is different and their interests are different.Not all are attracted by
same
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things
.Parents efforts and attitudes
also
 influence.
For instance
, my brother was eating chocolate along with his
child
 and he threw the wrapper on the street.His
child
 saw him doing it and he did the same. To conclude, I would say that children follow looking at what others do.
Moreover
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 their affinity towards the
things
 change and are influenced
accordingly
.It is
responsibility
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the responsibility
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 of both parents,
teachers
 and the inherent attributes of the
child
 which
finally
 decides their
behavoiur
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behaviour
 and destiny.
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