Once children enter school, teachers have more influence on their intellectual and social developments than parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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Children enter the school at

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innocent age of 4.Once they enter the school, their attitude and behavioural developments are carried away by the

teachers

.I do agree

this

is some extent.The essay will discuss more

about

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the statement. Children are quick learners.They grab the

things

into

the

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their mind very soon.The reason being, they don't have any other thoughts and are more

receptacle

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in the tender age.As they start going to school, the different phase of life starts.They spend most of

the

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their

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time with their peers and

teachers

.They slowly get to expose themselves to a wide range of

things

inside and outside of the class. Since in the class they are controlled by

teachers

, they get acquainted with the

things

teacher

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the teacher

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teaches

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them.To exemplify, one of my

neighbours

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neighbour's

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child

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children

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does drawing all day as she is told by her teacher that she is very good at it.

This

statement and encouragement of the teacher

motivates

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her and she is now a good artist. At the same time,

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agree

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this

to some extent and not completely because it

also

depends on how the

child

reacts.Every

child

is different and their interests are different.Not all are attracted by

same

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things

.Parents efforts and attitudes

also

influence.

For instance

, my brother was eating chocolate along with his

child

and he threw the wrapper on the street.His

child

saw him doing it and he did the same. To conclude, I would say that children follow looking at what others do.

Moreover

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their affinity towards the

things

change and are influenced

accordingly

.It is

responsibility

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the responsibility

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of both parents,

teachers

and the inherent attributes of the

child

which

finally

decides their

behavoiur

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behaviour

and destiny.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 5.5

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276 words

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