Report: Fewer and fewer young people are interested in working as a teacher. What do you think are the reasons? What can be done to solve this problem?

Being a
teacher
is no longer the
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fist
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choice for many young
adults
in recent years. I believe that the price increasing and internet advances spreading state-wide are the main reasons for
this
. The government should take steps to change
this
situation. The
first
reason why
less
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people
being a
teacher
is that the poor salary. As a growing price in many aspects
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their daily life, the low income of a
teacher
may prevent them to join social activities, like dating with others or joining some parties. And some of them need to reduce
such
expenses to pay off debts and buying a house to form a family. It will affect
the
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mental health
of
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them
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and reduce the quality of their lives. That’s why many young
adults
chose a well-paid job to lead a happy life rather than a steady one. The
second
reason is the advanced internet that brings more opportunities and challenging than before. Young
adults
can attend
meeting
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immediately with their colleagues abroad to discuss a project or even handle their work in
the
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public transportations using their smart devices by
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. That means more flexible work hours and forms to the young
adults
instead
of teaching
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in the class and repeat the same content over and over. I guess the multiple forms of work and flexibility may cause the young
adults
to escape to be
an
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unchanging
teacher
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. I think, that measures should be taken to solve those problems by
government
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.
Firstly
, give
this
job more benefits and improve welfare services. Like, prolong the time of summer vacations to teachers and maternity leave of young couples.
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, it will give them more time to enjoy their life and experience more in the world.
Secondly
, tax reduction and rising salaries in teaching may narrow the gap of salary in teaching and other jobs so that it can attract more young
people
to be a
teacher
instead
to
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suffering some dangerous job to raise
family
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. In conclusion, young
people
are less to be a
teacher
due to the inflation of prices and internet advances, which drive some young
adults
away. If the providing in pay and giving more obvious benefits to the young
people
will settle the problem.
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