Some people think that schools are no longer necessary because people can acquire information by internet. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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A prevailing opinion is that educational institutions become unnecessary in that people gain access to
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internet
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statement, as I see it, is more than unjustified. Others, holding the view that individuals are capable to acquire useful knowledge and to realize learners’ autonomy, believe that
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can enter a variety of websites
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as Baidu, Google to collect and pick out
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or relevant learning materials, thereby contributing to deal with their questions or confuses, which is not only convenient but
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around zero cost. With the development of network infrastructure, distance education creates an online learning opportunity for learners, who can study subjects through buying online courses, enabling them to learn at home without having to go to school.
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, undoubtedly, the meanings of
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’ existence
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far beyond a systematic learning course but a cultivating
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because the essence of
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is to create a comfortable and peaceful atmosphere where
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are protected from some bad
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like violence or crime , to help
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be physically and mentally healthy especially teenagers by shaping their sound
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personality
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and developing their maturity. Compared with the
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aiming at people of all ages, the subjects of
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is those immature children or teenagers who
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vulnerable to the adverse effects of the outside world. those children or teenagers who are not mentally mature enough to discern right and wrong should receive education in
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, for they are vulnerable to the adverse effects of the outside world, especially from the
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. The main cause that the
schools
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cannot be replaced is that they supported by governments
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instill
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the correct values into
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, and
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, the
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is full of mixed
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that needs people to distinguish
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between true
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and false. Apart from the subject knowledge and
skill sets
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,
schools
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can not be replaced
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that they bear
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the responsibility
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to
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the correct moral values into
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. In conclusion, even though there
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large amounts of
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available
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the
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, the school still play an irreplaceable role in schooling and instruction in terms of academic knowledge and morality.
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