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Nowadays people have free access to music and films online . Is this a positive or a negative development?

Presently,
people
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 can freely listen to music and watch
movies
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 through the internet. In my opinion, I believe
this
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 trend is totally negative.
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 with, the obvious downside of
this
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 trend is that it is most likely
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time consuming
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.
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 is because
people
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 can listen or watch
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the
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abundance of materials
which
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that
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 attracts different age groups;
as a result
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, they might
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loose
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lose
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 their attention to
time
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.
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, many parents complain that their children spend
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 long
time
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 watching cartoon
movies
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 on Youtube as
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 made them miss
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 of their homework.
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, many
people
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 at their work often watch
movies
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 online by using their smartphones ;
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, they lose focus to get their tasks done in
time
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. In brief ,
this
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 development caused many
people
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 to spend their
time
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 in
unproductive
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 way. Another downside related to
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 trend is that , over
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time
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, it could cause
detrimental
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a detrimental
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effect
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effects
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 on
people
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’s health.
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 based on the fact when
people
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 watch
movies
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 , they are usually sitting for long times ; with that in mind,
this
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 sedentary lifestyle has
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effect
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effects
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 as they could be diagnosed with diseases
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 as obesity or bones issues.
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, many medical
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 published recently , have proven
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 thoroughly.
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ways
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way
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 of conclusion ,
although
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 it has become the norm for
people
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 to use online media, I
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wholeheartedly
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whole heartedly
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 believe that it has significant disadvantages
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 as wasting
time
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 and potential health issues.

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Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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