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Some people believe that after a child enters school their teachers have more influence than their parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Child life is the best part of every person's life undoubtedly and in
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same
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 the school life
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 gives the same feel.
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,
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some
 believe that the teachers have more
influence
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 than parents when the child enters school. I strongly agree with
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 statement for the following reasons.
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 with, certainly, the tutors
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 more as compared
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 guardians because the toddler can spend more time with
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their teachers than mothers
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, they can easily
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, one of my neighbour
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says his teacher who Mr johnson is his
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 model even he studies only kinder garden.
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, many kids are enchanting
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 their's tutors dressing sense, character, and way of talking
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, they sometimes behave like their professors.
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, certainly, some teachers have more fans following
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among students due to care, love and support. Even the
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kids
kid's
 have more care and love
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 their family
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members
 even though, they will expect from
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person
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people
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such
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 as professors.
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, we can see that many children dream job is
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reaching
teaching
preaching
 because they inspire and enchanting with to their tutors that's why they tell.
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, many toddlers
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choose
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their future career
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field
 which is teaching and the reason for their enchanting with their coacher. To conclude, in the above-mentioned details can clearly
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explain
 the coacher
influence
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 to their students as compared the fathers. I hope
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 trend is conducive to build a
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harmonious
 society in order to many coachers will build.

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