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With internet improvements, people can leave views or opinions on certain goods or services that they have purchased. Is it a positive or negative development?

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Recently, with internet refinements,
people
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 have the ability to post their
reviews
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 about the
products
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 or services they have purchased. While there are some drawbacks of
this
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 trend, I would argue that there are far more benefits.
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people
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 to write their opinions is that sometimes lead to misleading information.
This
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 is because some
people
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 might buy
products
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 or services that they do not actually need ;
as a result
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, due to their resentment feeling, they might post online
reviews
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 stating that certain product
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 instance, is irrelevant and not worth buying.
Secondly
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, these online
reviews
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 could be exploited by rival corporations to manipulate
people
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 .
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at
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the
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mobile phone websites, some company’s
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fanboys
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fan boys
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fanboys
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 might swarm negative
reviews
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 about other
companies
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products
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, which might not be true in essence;
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, if many
people
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 believe these claims, they probably will not buy
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 product. Having said that , online
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 are most likely
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in
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to
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 enhancing the quality of
products
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 and services .
This
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 is due to fact that many
companies
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 around the world read
user
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 opinions , and thoroughly investigate
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these
reviews
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 ;
thus
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, if these
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user
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 claims are true, these
companies
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 start to rectify possible issues found, resulting in positive
products
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 produced afterwards.
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, many software
companies
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such
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Apple
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as Apple
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,
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 relies on
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user
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 feedback to continuously improve their software. An additional advantage is that some
people
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 with technical
background
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backgrounds
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 give honest
reviews
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 about the
products
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 on their accord, which in turn worthwhile for
companies
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 , and for users to be able to briefly distinguish between
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 of
products
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 easily.
By
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ways
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 of conclusion ,
although
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user
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reviews
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 have some downsides
such
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 as causing
mislead
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 information, I consider it to be positive development overall as it
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 to better quality over
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time.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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