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some people think that newspapers are the best way to get news. However, others believe that they can get news better through other media platforms. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In recent years, science and technology are constantly developing, the
media
 is no exception.
Therefore
, some people think that
newspapers
 are the best way to get
news
.
However
, others believe that they can get
news
 better through other
media
platforms
. Personally, I agree with both of
view
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views
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 and give the reason below.
First
 and
for most
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,
newspapers
 are suitable for most senior citizens. Because they have a habit of reading a newspaper every day. And it is difficult for them to change a habit.
Moreover
,
newspapers
 are a more reliable source of
information
 than
those
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of
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media
platforms
.
Newspapers
 are written by professional journalists and they have to be checked, edited carefully before
the
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reaching the reading public.
However
,
media
platforms
is
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also
the
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 convenient way to approach
to
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the
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new
information
. With the widespread of the internet, readers can receive
the
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information
 faster. They only have portable devices
such
 as smartphones, laptops and so on. It is easy to access
a
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huge storage of
news
 in just a few clicks. In conclusion, both
newspapers
 or
media
platforms
 have not only advantaged sides but
also
 disadvantaged sides.
Newspapers
 are very popular, but
that is
 not the best way to get access to
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 of
information
.
Furthermore
, online
news
 attract people to read, thanks to the constant advancement in technology
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