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Some people think that with combined effort on the part of government and society crime can be completed eradicated, while others argue that this is completely hypothetical and that crime has always been present in societies even in ancient times. Compare these two views. Which do you agree with?

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Crime
 is known to exist
since
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 ages and
also
 has been mentioned in ancient scriptures. Some believe that eradication of
crime
 needs a combined effort from the government and the society
however
 others believe that it is humanely impossible to stop
crime
. In
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 I will explain both the views and agree that a combined effort will drastically reduce the percentage of
crime
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a crime
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 if not abolish it.
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society including both the developed as well as the developing countries. Most of the unlawful behaviour of an individual is the result of poverty, unemployment, income disparity between poor and rich plus the communities attitude towards these people. If these factors are corrected by the government
then
 it is possible for the criminals to give up and work for a better future. The overall commitment of the individual and the society for the upliftment of themselves will decrease
crime
 significantly. At the same time, it is almost impossible to abolish
crime
 as there is an associated personality disorder in these individuals. They commit
crime
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 for
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pleasure and elation to them with
absence
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the absence
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 of remorse for others feelings. The notorious criminal Charles sobraj was ecstatic for his crimes with no guilty feeling. To summarise, a valiant effort needs to be done by
government
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 with
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attitude
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 of the population towards
crime
 and criminals for reducing the percentage of crimes.
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