Some people think that more money should be spent on protecting endangered species, while others think it is a waste of valuable money. What is your opinion?

The issue of extinction of
species
increasing fast. For some people, by spending money people can preserve
species
.While
,
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for
others
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it
is just throw
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the money. I personally maintain that there is strong evidence to justify the former view.
First
and most obviously, killing the endangered
species
will cause the
disappearing
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of humans lives in the near future, and it recommends
to fund
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the projects which are responsible
on
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protecting these
species
.
Therefore
, money should be spent on protecting endangered
species
to maintain the balance in the ecosystem.
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,
dying
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of animals can result in destroying natural habitats.
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