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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give you own opinion.

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Accepting a bad
situation
 or trying the best to improve in
this
situation
. From my point of
view
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 both are acceptable ways of passing through a bad moment. In
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 it will be analyzed the differences between both perspectives and it will be shown some advantages and disadvantages between them. Starting
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with accepting a bad
situation
, it can be said that thinking clearly will help to understand the
situation
, which will help to surpass a bad moment.
However
, it is almost impossible to always remain positive or in a good mood in a down moment, so even if you try
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to always be nice and accept everything you may end up overwhelmed and really stressed, making it harder to think clearly. Moving onto the
next
 option trying to improve could be a weapon of double edge. As it can be a good way to have your mind occupied thinking and moving forward to
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 level it
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 could damage you even more than you are.
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 it is a harmful
situation
 like the death of someone you love, you probably won’t have the strength to be thinking about other matters. From my way of seeing the best option depends on the
situation
 even though I would be likely to choose the
first
 one. Accepting all that come across may be difficult, but it is the
first
 move for passing through it. If you try to improve maybe you couldn’t think clearly and it will overcharge you, so I would definitely say that accepting a bad
situation
 it’s the option that suits more with me.
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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