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Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Government must invest this money in public services instead. Do what extent do you agree with this statement?

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Investing money in arts,
such
 as music and theatre has been quite an argument towards most the people from the government. Some people believe that there are far more important government programs that should get funding
such
 as, public work. Art is part of human culture, which is needed for the preservation of human history and customs.
For example
, having an exhibit of paintings and historical buildings,
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which gives us an insight into the past as well as educating our children and students with the history from decades ago. It is a great deal of getting a lot of information that we can share all through throughout the
next
 years.
Also
, we can enjoy seeing them with our family and friends during our leisure time.
On the other hand
, government public business must receive funding as well, in order to function. It includes paying for the employee's salary, maintenance of the public infrastructures and other business that they need.
Although
 public assistance might need more money to complete all the projects. In my opinion, it would be wise to give investment to both sides, it would give both
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 a chance to continue with the programs they ought to do for the betterment of all.
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