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Everyone should adopt a vegetarian diet because eating meat can cause serious health problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#diet #meat #health
We live in a world, where we need
food
 to survive, whether it includes
meat
 or not. some people think that
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 everyone needs to adopt a vegetarian diet and stop eating
meat
 because it's not good for their health. Well, here I strongly disagree with
this
 statement and I am going to explain my point of view in the following paragraphs.
To begin
 with, Most people do not like
food
 which is made up of vegetables. They have their own reasons, crowd eat it because it's a good source of proteins, carbohydrates and vitamins. According to a
meat
 farm ,survey 63 per cent of people consume foodstuff and they are more active and fit as compared to the one's who take vegetables and fruits. It's nothing more than a hoax that
meat
 is bad for health.
Moreover
, eating non-vegetarian
food
 help the injured ones to heal fast. I don't see a doctor suggesting vegetables for
this
 most of the doctor's think that taking
food
 at least one time a day help patients to heal quickly.
For instance
, when I was a kid I had a kidney disease where I loose lot's of important nutrients through urine on a daily basis and guess what my doctor suggests goat foodstuff to me because it's fully packed with all the nutrients that we need for everyday survival. In the
last
, I personally think that we all need to add a slice of
meat
 to our diet because it's good for our overall health and there is no proven record where you can find eat a non-vegetarian diet can kill or give us an incurable disease, So please stop overthinking and start eating
food
.
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