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In many part of the world there is not enough food for everyone. what are the causes and solutions?

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In the world, there are many places where is a shortage of
food
. There are many reasons which impact water level, soil infertile and many more. In the following
paragraphs
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 I will discuss the causes and solutions for it.
To begin
 with, there is no doubt that the earth is full of nutrition. The fundamental cause is climate around the world because of different amounts of radiation's received from the sun at
a different parts
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different parts
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 of the earth at different times of the year.
For instance
, the northern part of India is known for farming because the weather is moderate and suitable for many crops
such
 as wheat, rice and for vegetables, fruits but
on the other hand
, the state known as Rajasthan are unable to grow
such
food
 because of very warm climate. The other reason is less supply of resources and awareness.
For example
, In many rural
areas
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 people do not know the perfect way of farming and they will not have machines like tractors, and other useful equipment.
Firstly
, the human will not fight with the climate but they will reach the areas where is a shortage of
food
 and helped them to provide sufficient
food
 for their living.
Moreover
, the communities should take
the
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responsibility and collect the funds and distribute
to
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them to
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 them. For
this
, there is one community known as Khalsa aid, they reach to those parts and serve
food
 to the masses.
Secondly
, the government should aware of the people and raise the demand for growing crops in those particular places with which the government interchange the
food
 with other places and help the public to get
food
 at reasonable prices. To be concluded that, everything is not in the hand of humans but we should contribute to help the others in way of providing free
food
 to them and
also
 the government of all nations should take the steps for providing
food
 to everyone at low prices.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • scarcity
  • malnutrition
  • hunger
  • poverty
  • food security
  • population explosion
  • income disparity
  • drought
  • flood
  • deforestation
  • soil erosion
  • irrigation
  • seeds
  • fertilizers
  • pesticides
  • farmers
  • subsistence farming
  • sustainable agriculture
  • food processing
  • food preservation
  • food distribution
  • public transportation
  • investments
  • education
  • awareness
  • policy
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