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Many countries use fossil fuels such as coal or oil as the main sources of energy. However, in some countries the use of alternative sources of energy is encouraged. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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It is true that today many countries remain to use fossil fuels in all their daily activities. In my opinion, I totally disagree with
this
 trend, and those nations should take into consideration using renewable
sources
 of
energy
. There are some disadvantages of alternative
sources
 of
energy
.
Firstly
, nuclear
energy
, in the past, brought many disasters to humans, especially in Japan. Those disasters not only exert a negative impact on the environment but
also
 on people’s health.
Thus
, the Japanese took many years. Effort and money to recover from these accidents, but it still left a legacy of cancer which has affected many lives of their
next
 generations.
Secondly
, when wind
energy
 generates, it is very noisy. The elderly and children who are very vulnerable can face up many disorders
such
 as insomnia when they live in those areas.
However
, some positive implications of renewable
sources
 of
energy
 can be denied. Those types of
energy
 are made from wind, sun, tide or water, so the prices of them are cheap and their
sources
 are boundless. Fossil fuels need thousand of years to form, but they quickly run out.
Moreover
, alternative
sources
 of
energy
 are eco-friendly. Because, Humans do not need to burn coal or fuel, so
this
 does not emit CO2 or other contaminants.
Additionally
, people are not necessary to destroy natural habitats to extract those kinds of
energy
. In conclusion, there are many tangible benefits of renewable
energy
 that can not be disputed. More and more countries should invest time,
energy
, and workforces to put those types of
energy
 into use.
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  • renewable energy
  • solar power
  • wind energy
  • hydroelectricity
  • geothermal
  • biomass
  • sustainability
  • fossil fuels
  • greenhouse gases
  • carbon footprint
  • sustainable development
  • energy efficiency
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • ecosystems
  • natural resources
  • energy consumption
  • carbon emissions
  • environmental degradation
  • technological advancements
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