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Many countries use fossil fuels such as coal or oil as the main sources of energy. However, in some countries the use of alternative sources of energy is encouraged. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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It is true that today many countries remain to use fossil fuels in all their daily activities. In my opinion, I totally disagree with
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 trend, and those nations should take into consideration using renewable
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 of
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. There are some disadvantages of alternative
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 of
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, nuclear
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, in the past, brought many disasters to humans, especially in Japan. Those disasters not only exert a negative impact on the environment but
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 on people’s health.
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, the Japanese took many years. Effort and money to recover from these accidents, but it still left a legacy of cancer which has affected many lives of their
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 generations.
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, when wind
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 generates, it is very noisy. The elderly and children who are very vulnerable can face up many disorders
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 as insomnia when they live in those areas.
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, some positive implications of renewable
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 of
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 can be denied. Those types of
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 are made from wind, sun, tide or water, so the prices of them are cheap and their
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 are boundless. Fossil fuels need thousand of years to form, but they quickly run out.
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, alternative
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 of
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 are eco-friendly. Because, Humans do not need to burn coal or fuel, so
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 does not emit CO2 or other contaminants.
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, people are not necessary to destroy natural habitats to extract those kinds of
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. In conclusion, there are many tangible benefits of renewable
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 that can not be disputed. More and more countries should invest time,
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, and workforces to put those types of
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 into use.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • renewable energy
  • solar power
  • wind energy
  • hydroelectricity
  • geothermal
  • biomass
  • sustainability
  • fossil fuels
  • greenhouse gases
  • carbon footprint
  • sustainable development
  • energy efficiency
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • ecosystems
  • natural resources
  • energy consumption
  • carbon emissions
  • environmental degradation
  • technological advancements
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