A gift (such as a camera, a soccer, or an animal ) can contribute to a child's development. what gift would you give to help a child develop? why? use reasons and specific examples to support your choices.

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People have different views about whether the effectiveness of a
gift
on
children
and what kind of
gift
suitable for them. I believe that
gift
is an essential tool for a child
grows
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, so we should best
gift
for them. Most of the parents are
love
to take care of their youth properly. For
this
reason, they choose several kinds of
way
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ways
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. Among them gifting something is a popular way. In past ,
generally
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people made any handcraft for
children
. But nowadays most people give electric toys or gadgets as a
gift
.
For example
, car, motorcycle, electric
books
, Gans, Tablet, camera.
Besides
football, animals and soccer
also
famous
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gift
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gifts
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. Because of child's entertainment. ,
Besides
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it is really helpful for
children
's development. When they play
by
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those kinds of
toy
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toys
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, sometimes their interest
also
grows on
about
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toys. They think about how these
plaything
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playthings
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work. In order that
,
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apply
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some particular
gift
needed for their growth.
Although
some gifts
has
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a negative impact
also
. There are lots of bad impacts of electric gifts. Sometimes it is harmful to
children
. So that when
i
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I
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get the chance to give any
gift
i
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I
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always prefer football,
books
and a
bycycle
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bicycle
. But
i
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I
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know in modern days most of the
children
does not
love
it. As they used to see their parents always use mobile
phone
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phones
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, laptops and watch drama or movies on TV. As a ,
result
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inresult
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a big number of
children
love
an
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apply
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electric gadgets. But
i
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I
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know
books
is
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are
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important for them. Primarily they did not
love
it but slowly but surely their interest will rise
on
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in
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it.
As a result
, they will read
books
. Reading
books
is a great habit. In conclusion, for the development of ,
child
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the child
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we should pick the best
gift
for them as they did not know what toys are beneficial for them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • development
  • creativity
  • observational skills
  • attention to detail
  • self-expression
  • confidence
  • physical fitness
  • health
  • teamwork
  • discipline
  • communication skills
  • social development
  • determination
  • goal-setting
  • responsibility
  • empathy
  • emotional support
  • curiosity
  • biology
  • educational growth
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