Doctors recommend that older people should exercise regularly. However, many of them do not exercise enough. What are the causes? What can be done to encourage them?

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These days old generation
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not do physical
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enough.
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, doctors say to them that older
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should do
exercises
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on a daily basis. There are various reasons for
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, elderly
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and medics both and need to work together to improve the situation. One of the main causes of the
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is that elderly
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people
cannot exercise due to
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worst health. A solution is for the
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to see a doctor to start treatment which helps to be ready for physical
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. It would hopefully lead to a return to the sport and running.Another factor is that elders avoid
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sport which can hurt their
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.
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afraid to damage their body.To tackle
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issue that they overcome fear and be
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careful
to do athletic
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. The
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cause of the
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is that older
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are lazy to exercise these sports and jogging. Which would solve
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that
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elders
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want to play sports with desire and improve their discipline. To sum up there are various reasons for
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rise in returning sports which old generation want to be in shape. My view is that the main responsibility for solving the
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lies with both elderly
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and doctors.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • motivation
  • physical limitations
  • lack of time
  • fear of injury
  • exercise facilities
  • misunderstanding
  • benefits of exercise
  • social support
  • poor health conditions
  • awareness
  • appropriate exercises
  • guidance
  • financial constraints
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