Doctors recommend that older people should exercise regularly. However, many of them do not exercise enough. What are the causes? What can be done to encourage them?

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older
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and efford on health.
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suggest that the biggest problems caused by
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solution to
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is motivation or person who will control elderly
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on their desire. What
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mean by
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that they should know for what reason they do it and how motivated are they to do
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, millions of older all over the world try to avoid
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exercise
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or
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, thirty
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of
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or inability to
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positive
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side and always support them. If each person will support at least in words they will be more active and do more physical activities.
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way to do some sports and they should start doing the exercises to rid of the inability.
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is
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and when he was young he can not run due to the accident but he never
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up and he
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to move and until
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • motivation
  • physical limitations
  • lack of time
  • fear of injury
  • exercise facilities
  • misunderstanding
  • benefits of exercise
  • social support
  • poor health conditions
  • awareness
  • appropriate exercises
  • guidance
  • financial constraints
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